You *KNOW* it's gonna be a DOOZY when there's no MC side quest/we jump right in... 🤣
Can I write how much I love your parallels of MC past to what's happening in (present time) episode? You have the shared symbols/themes, of course: the knife; being at an event you're not welcome in; and even the people, as it seems some of those fawning kids are now the (horny)teens at Halloween party.... But there's also differences: MC being ignored in the past and now made painfully visible. 3 people there on MC's side -- even if they don't always know how to show it. And this time - despite having every right: MC not losing control. Especially impressive after James' speech; I was shaking with anger and wanted to strangle bro myself.
Still: Nia (Obsessed) and how the routes differ (romance to rivalmance). I have to give you your flowers because you could have just changed a few words during pool scene, made one 'soft', the other 'angry' -- but each had such utterly different vibes - neither less than the other; physicality vs. emotional. (I certainly wasn't expecting one having them go into the pool and the other not! And the worm for the Birdie - STHAAAP 😍) Same for what Nia says after working on party music--the implication of sex; the implication of love. BOTH had me 🤯🤯 Biggest shock, though, was Nia -- cold, emotionless, 'lie in wait' Nia -- handling an entire James upon seeing his actions to MC. Didn't even hesitate. Hits harder with the 'Do No Harm' aspect; if *that's* not Love.....
Amazing job; excited romances are locked in, as well. 1 of my fav episodes for how much was said without being said. (P.S. Laugh option after James scuffle was the most amazing thing EVER)
Okay I'm a little confused, bear with me, at the end of chapter seven you get a "end of part one" does it refer to the chapter part? I don't know how many chapters this game is supposed to have XD PELASEPLEASEDONTBETHEENDOFITGODICANTTAKEITSTOOGOOD
absolute Incredible game, I especially love the beginning where the MC is talked about as if it was a creature or something else not human. I love the complex relationship the MC has with (in my case) Nia and how incredibly sad everything is, im also in love with all the frequent Flashbacks to the MCs Past.
Great Work and Waiting Exited yet Patiently for more!!!
Wow everything in this update is an emotional physical and mental whiplash but I mean this in the best way because that's exactly what I expected for this story ❤
And the horror is only getting more horrifying because that cliffhanger? Omg
I'm sorry, I do love this IF so don't take this too negatively but that whole party did made me lose a-lot of love I had for the characters, especially for Imre's route.
After everything the MC has gone through, the voice in their head, the "asylum", their family, the bullying and disdain from a whole town? just for all three of them to watch us go through something as horrific as that? None of them came to check on you afterwards, all of them going off to enjoy themselves knowing what just happened, *And then* each one of them berates and treats you like shit afterwards?? When one of them suggested just splitting up and going our separate ways I almost wish it was an option because I really just wanted to crash out on all of them.
The writing is absolutely beautiful though! This isn't a knock against the story at-all, it's phenomenal and the fact the character's can make someone this engaged is amazing!, this is more of a 'Let me pull a Carrie on them all' kinda thing <3
For some reason I’m actually getting itchio notifications now wow! So to clarify a bit, they didn’t actually go enjoy themselves. They went to kick James out, he mentions it.
Although I’d like to say how I see it, if you don’t mind ☺️
I don’t think that just because Crowny went through something bad means that it magically fixes the characters relationships with them. Whatever happened with James isn’t a bandaid. It would be one thing for them to say Crowny got what they deserved. It is another to then have all of them act completely differently to them then they have when there are more deeper things going on. Also an important note is that they start all berating each other, no one dogpiled on Crowny.
I’m sorry I just didn’t know what you expected from these three 😭 its been shown that a) they have their own issues b) not a healthy way to show it thats way they next scene with James is the way they show crowny they care because they’re willing to go to prison as accomplices for them. I feel like that’s a good big step to fix their own relationships, all 4
P.S: I hope you don’t take this as me berating you or anything! I just wanted to give my two cents ♥️
Noo!! It's OK, I totally wouldn't take it that way, I felt the same when I was writing my own post since it's hard to convey meaning over text so I struggled to word it properly it's all good!
I get what you're saying, especially the bit at the end where they come together to protect Crowny (That really clicked for me when I did Lorcan's route and he clarified it as 'our' mess <3) I was more so referring to the bit between what happens with James and the meet up with the whole gang, for instance I did Imre's route and after he pulled his little twist I could imagine how much worse the MC felt, so I tried to speak to the other two with their friendship dialogue's but *both* ended in arguments. At that point I just felt like Crowny was/would feel very isolated and their emotions would be a-lot more all over the place/volatile .
However your reply did clear some of that up and help me understand it better! Especially with how everyone wanted to get there own stuff off of their chest, and of-course with everything else that happened that just wasn't going to be possible, this is just very much me going through all of that arguing/emotional turmoil right before the cliff-hanger!
I've played this game over and over again, and I've never seen this come up even once, is there something wrong with my game version or my laptop? I've updated to the newest version
edit: Something similar came up when typing in my charcters nickname
edit2: Some of the choices are missing and some of the dialouge is missing as well
Should work now. For future reference it’s quicker to reach me on tumblr than it is on itch.io since I hardly ever get notified when someone posts on here
love this! there were quite a bit of spelling mistakes, A few extra word\letters in a Few sentences and Other stuff but that doesnt really bother me, just made a few sentences harder to understand (Atleast for me) But still that doesnt really matter imo ^^
Absolutely incredible, I binged it with every spare minute I got. I noticed some grammatical and spelling errors but thats me being a bit of a snob. Keep it up, I love it.
Also still need to know more about this wretched town. I do love this kind of stories.
Well now we know why Lorcan is so hard on MC. Btw his normal romance is wonderful thing. Feels very organic to me.
I wonder what's Imre's angle on rival romance. Which I love far more than normal one. He is still most deranged of the three, I'm truly fascinated.
But Nia is still the best, as dearest and nearest.
Sally's attempts to make MC find new friends made me feel so fecken bad for them both. Also he is not so patient with MC anymore, I'm awaiting huuuuge scandals.
As for mother dearest... I was delighted to see depressing options, this IF really hits me with something. But moreover I was glad that MC could feel bad for her.
I'm kinda trying to think of the ways to not despise MC family, Orla and parents particularly. But it's hard not to. Then again there are so many really fecked up things about MC that. Well. Escalated this family's unhappiness and cruelty. I wonder how much of this on voice in MC'S head. I wonder if MC is some kind of vessel. I wonder what Nia and Sally see in them.
Thank you again for sharing your stories with us. I still remember my skepticism when I first stumbled upon this. And well look at me now!
no i mean im always stuck on that one page where imre and locran and mc are on the cafe investigating sharing theories and then the next page i have to type and answer one thing the victim have in common
On turn 504, after you walk out on sally trying to introduce you to Dina and Travis, the options "Plead with him" and "Escalate things" both just lead to a blank box. Is this a bug or is that the end of the content so far?
I have never had an IF make me feel so strongly. The bullying and tense scenes, as well as Mc's baggage, are so well written that they're terrifying. The mc had so much character and I love it.
Really like how this IF's story goes, but I'm stumped at the meeting with Lorcan and Imre after the TV finding. Is the text box supposed to be a placeholder or it actually should mean something... My 3am brain really couldn't brain it out
Edit: ok nvm I figured it out after a whole day of work lmao
I’m sorry I didn’t answer 😭 for some reason itch.io doesn’t notify me when I get comments anymore but yeah if you ever are stumped ask me on tumblr I’m more active on there ☺️
im OBSESSED with this game, i love how the MC is shown and I adore all the characters :3 (Except Stephanie's boyfriend, hes a weirdo)
I also love the little details, how the other people respond to the MC depending on gender, temperament, and such!!! it makes me really happy to see all those little details put into an already amazing game.
I keep checking it everyday in hopes an update comes cause im impatient, but I really do love this IF and will be drawing my MC as soon as possible
I started to read but my heart wasn't in it, I didn't want to play as a high-schooler. Man was I wrong.
MC is... thanks god and sorry, but I am glad mc is not relatable to me. Still that doesn't mean I wasn't enjoying every crumbs of their past, feeling and reactions. Also the wit. Overall, I want to say that I stayed for this broken child. I came to read about mysterious things but stayed for mc.
Nia is the most sane person here, and I love her. Fall out childhood friends are the best pain, and you delivered. I wonder how did they become friends, I'm worried about her father and his presence in her life. I wonder about the fact that she cares still.
I kept Imre close, and oh my that boy is no less insane than mc. Is that allowed to say? Golden boy, pillar of community and absolutely manipulative egotistical lad.
Lorcan scared the hell out of me in the very beginning, but not now. I will try his route next.
Sally is the most heavy topic for me. And this fact, well, it makes me think about my family situation. I'm thankful for that too.
Joke on me, I'm so emotionally invested into this story. All thanks to your skills as a writer. It's haunted, it's morbid, it's fun. It's insightful in a way that I did not expect. So. Good luck to you! Hope to read more.
"In my restless dreams I see that town..." Anyway, just wanted to say that this is really, really good, the MC is so incredibly well written, it's rare we get such a treat in a CYOA where the protagonist is an actual part of the narrative instead of just a vehicle through which we experience it. I'm looking forward to more chapters, that cliffhanger was something else!
I don't understand does it end 0n turn 195 after it says "One day your son will do something you won't be able to save him from.", because after that it's just a blank box? Otherwise very well done. And if it doesn't end there(as it's in episode 3 and isn't there 5 episode), is there a way to fix it? Thanks!
yes so there was a twine update that messed up existing code (it's very annoying that it does that) but I'll get to this week and make a post here to announce it when it's done!
GODDDD I just finished the most recent chapter and I’ve gone over all the routes like 5 times, Imre takes the cake though, he’s so interesting and I can’t wait too see more of him, he’s so complex (extremely fine too) and I love it. Great writing!! Kudos to you for all of these updates big and small, thank you for your hard work, looking forward to the next one!
I feel like there’s so many moments with the boys, and I get it when ol’ girl is purposely avoiding MC, but their Complicated is *delicious* - and I have been Waiting for this sort of scene between them for so. Damn. Long. And you delivered: The imagery, the tension, (the inevitable, incomprehensible flirting?) Fabulous. I even did another run to see what her rivalmance is like — and I love them both. Seeing Nia give anything - More than apathy is something me and MC *both* crave, yet never expect. Gotta love it when the childhood friend hurts the most…. Thanks for the meal (literal and figurative)~
I don't think I've commented on this IF before so I really want to give it the praise it deserveS
You are an incredible writer! I love how personable the dialogue options are for the MC and how distinct it sets them apart from everyone in the cast
I love the ad segments I got a real good laugh at the lice reveal for this new update and I hope they've been a fun for you to write like they are for me to read them!!
The one last thing I'll say is that it's really understated at times just how amazing you writers are for creating IF mainly for free so I give you a million thankyous for sharing your story with us!
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OMG I JUST FINISHED IT AND IT WAS SOOOO GOOD!! WHEN'S PART 2 COMING OUT, I LOVE THIS STORY SMMMMM!!!
absoulutly crying THE CLIFFHANGER HOW DARE YOU (╯︵╰ ) I can't forgive you on this I fear (〃⇀‸↼)
Anwaysss loved this update and cannot wait for the rest!(●´∀｀●)
You *KNOW* it's gonna be a DOOZY when there's no MC side quest/we jump right in... 🤣
Can I write how much I love your parallels of MC past to what's happening in (present time) episode? You have the shared symbols/themes, of course: the knife; being at an event you're not welcome in; and even the people, as it seems some of those fawning kids are now the (horny)teens at Halloween party.... But there's also differences: MC being ignored in the past and now made painfully visible. 3 people there on MC's side -- even if they don't always know how to show it. And this time - despite having every right: MC not losing control. Especially impressive after James' speech; I was shaking with anger and wanted to strangle bro myself.
Still: Nia (Obsessed) and how the routes differ (romance to rivalmance). I have to give you your flowers because you could have just changed a few words during pool scene, made one 'soft', the other 'angry' -- but each had such utterly different vibes - neither less than the other; physicality vs. emotional. (I certainly wasn't expecting one having them go into the pool and the other not! And the worm for the Birdie - STHAAAP 😍) Same for what Nia says after working on party music--the implication of sex; the implication of love. BOTH had me 🤯🤯 Biggest shock, though, was Nia -- cold, emotionless, 'lie in wait' Nia -- handling an entire James upon seeing his actions to MC. Didn't even hesitate. Hits harder with the 'Do No Harm' aspect; if *that's* not Love.....
Amazing job; excited romances are locked in, as well. 1 of my fav episodes for how much was said without being said. (P.S. Laugh option after James scuffle was the most amazing thing EVER)
Okay I'm a little confused, bear with me, at the end of chapter seven you get a "end of part one" does it refer to the chapter part? I don't know how many chapters this game is supposed to have XD
PELASEPLEASEDONTBETHEENDOFITGODICANTTAKEITSTOOGOODDon’t worry it’s just the mid season point! The season is cut up into 2!
thank you sm for the update it was so good!!
Holy shiiiit, this is so good omg. I'm obsessed!!
absolute Incredible game, I especially love the beginning where the MC is talked about as if it was a creature or something else not human. I love the complex relationship the MC has with (in my case) Nia and how incredibly sad everything is, im also in love with all the frequent Flashbacks to the MCs Past.
Great Work and Waiting Exited yet Patiently for more!!!
words cannot describe how much I adore this will definitely spend my night reading all the routes❤️
Wow everything in this update is an emotional physical and mental whiplash but I mean this in the best way because that's exactly what I expected for this story ❤
And the horror is only getting more horrifying because that cliffhanger? Omg
I'm sorry, I do love this IF so don't take this too negatively but that whole party did made me lose a-lot of love I had for the characters, especially for Imre's route.
After everything the MC has gone through, the voice in their head, the "asylum", their family, the bullying and disdain from a whole town? just for all three of them to watch us go through something as horrific as that? None of them came to check on you afterwards, all of them going off to enjoy themselves knowing what just happened, *And then* each one of them berates and treats you like shit afterwards?? When one of them suggested just splitting up and going our separate ways I almost wish it was an option because I really just wanted to crash out on all of them.
The writing is absolutely beautiful though! This isn't a knock against the story at-all, it's phenomenal and the fact the character's can make someone this engaged is amazing!, this is more of a 'Let me pull a Carrie on them all' kinda thing <3
For some reason I’m actually getting itchio notifications now wow! So to clarify a bit, they didn’t actually go enjoy themselves. They went to kick James out, he mentions it.
Although I’d like to say how I see it, if you don’t mind ☺️
I don’t think that just because Crowny went through something bad means that it magically fixes the characters relationships with them. Whatever happened with James isn’t a bandaid. It would be one thing for them to say Crowny got what they deserved. It is another to then have all of them act completely differently to them then they have when there are more deeper things going on. Also an important note is that they start all berating each other, no one dogpiled on Crowny.
I’m sorry I just didn’t know what you expected from these three 😭 its been shown that a) they have their own issues b) not a healthy way to show it thats way they next scene with James is the way they show crowny they care because they’re willing to go to prison as accomplices for them. I feel like that’s a good big step to fix their own relationships, all 4
P.S: I hope you don’t take this as me berating you or anything! I just wanted to give my two cents ♥️
Noo!! It's OK, I totally wouldn't take it that way, I felt the same when I was writing my own post since it's hard to convey meaning over text so I struggled to word it properly it's all good!
I get what you're saying, especially the bit at the end where they come together to protect Crowny (That really clicked for me when I did Lorcan's route and he clarified it as 'our' mess <3) I was more so referring to the bit between what happens with James and the meet up with the whole gang, for instance I did Imre's route and after he pulled his little twist I could imagine how much worse the MC felt, so I tried to speak to the other two with their friendship dialogue's but *both* ended in arguments. At that point I just felt like Crowny was/would feel very isolated and their emotions would be a-lot more all over the place/volatile .
However your reply did clear some of that up and help me understand it better! Especially with how everyone wanted to get there own stuff off of their chest, and of-course with everything else that happened that just wasn't going to be possible, this is just very much me going through all of that arguing/emotional turmoil right before the cliff-hanger!
Does anybody know what the "one thing" is? I've been looking for it for quite some time but I can't figure it out. much appreciated!!
if youre talking about the scene with Imre and Lorcan in the cafe the word is 'party' :3
AHH TYSM!!!!! <33333333
I've played this game over and over again, and I've never seen this come up even once, is there something wrong with my game version or my laptop? I've updated to the newest version
edit: Something similar came up when typing in my charcters nickname
edit2: Some of the choices are missing and some of the dialouge is missing as well
Should work now. For future reference it’s quicker to reach me on tumblr than it is on itch.io since I hardly ever get notified when someone posts on here
Hey, what was this recent update for? Is it adding onto the forest scene
love this! there were quite a bit of spelling mistakes, A few extra word\letters in a Few sentences and Other stuff but that doesnt really bother me, just made a few sentences harder to understand (Atleast for me) But still that doesnt really matter imo ^^
This is so Welcome to Night Vale and I love it. The 'ads' every chapter break are so fun to read.
Absolutely incredible, I binged it with every spare minute I got. I noticed some grammatical and spelling errors but thats me being a bit of a snob. Keep it up, I love it.
So glad to see an update! Thank you so much :)
I'm in love with side quests. You did so good!!!
Also still need to know more about this wretched town. I do love this kind of stories.
Well now we know why Lorcan is so hard on MC. Btw his normal romance is wonderful thing. Feels very organic to me.
I wonder what's Imre's angle on rival romance. Which I love far more than normal one. He is still most deranged of the three, I'm truly fascinated.
But Nia is still the best, as dearest and nearest.
Sally's attempts to make MC find new friends made me feel so fecken bad for them both. Also he is not so patient with MC anymore, I'm awaiting huuuuge scandals.
As for mother dearest... I was delighted to see depressing options, this IF really hits me with something. But moreover I was glad that MC could feel bad for her.
I'm kinda trying to think of the ways to not despise MC family, Orla and parents particularly. But it's hard not to. Then again there are so many really fecked up things about MC that. Well. Escalated this family's unhappiness and cruelty. I wonder how much of this on voice in MC'S head. I wonder if MC is some kind of vessel. I wonder what Nia and Sally see in them.
Thank you again for sharing your stories with us. I still remember my skepticism when I first stumbled upon this. And well look at me now!
when is the next update?
I crave more Lorcan
GAHHH I need more Imre I’m convulsing he’s so 🤤
what are we supposed to answer to continue
For what?
to continue to the next chapter like is it for patreon only
The next chapter isn't written yet it's just to 6
no i mean im always stuck on that one page where imre and locran and mc are on the cafe investigating sharing theories and then the next page i have to type and answer one thing the victim have in common
The answer is party
for the interlude. when i try and answer the question it doesnt go through
i always got locked out to an option to sit beside nia in a car? how do i unlock that option?
You don't if you chose to talk to her at the theatre it locks you out. You're not missing anything it's basically the same convo
On turn 504, after you walk out on sally trying to introduce you to Dina and Travis, the options "Plead with him" and "Escalate things" both just lead to a blank box. Is this a bug or is that the end of the content so far?
It was a bug it should be working now :)
hi,do we have to be part of patreon to be able to continue the story?
so the next chapter will go public after I finish some things but for now it is on Patreon
I love this game so much. The MC is their own person and not a blank slate. And the worldbuilding is outstanding. Really great job.
update.T^T
i don’t know when I’ll update. Please don’t pressure me.
I have never had an IF make me feel so strongly. The bullying and tense scenes, as well as Mc's baggage, are so well written that they're terrifying. The mc had so much character and I love it.
Really like how this IF's story goes, but I'm stumped at the meeting with Lorcan and Imre after the TV finding. Is the text box supposed to be a placeholder or it actually should mean something... My 3am brain really couldn't brain it out
Edit: ok nvm I figured it out after a whole day of work lmao
I’m sorry I didn’t answer 😭 for some reason itch.io doesn’t notify me when I get comments anymore but yeah if you ever are stumped ask me on tumblr I’m more active on there ☺️
im OBSESSED with this game, i love how the MC is shown and I adore all the characters :3 (Except Stephanie's boyfriend, hes a weirdo)
I also love the little details, how the other people respond to the MC depending on gender, temperament, and such!!! it makes me really happy to see all those little details put into an already amazing game.
I keep checking it everyday in hopes an update comes cause im impatient, but I really do love this IF and will be drawing my MC as soon as possible
Im gonna start with this - i am impressed.
I started to read but my heart wasn't in it, I didn't want to play as a high-schooler. Man was I wrong.
MC is... thanks god and sorry, but I am glad mc is not relatable to me. Still that doesn't mean I wasn't enjoying every crumbs of their past, feeling and reactions. Also the wit. Overall, I want to say that I stayed for this broken child. I came to read about mysterious things but stayed for mc.
Nia is the most sane person here, and I love her. Fall out childhood friends are the best pain, and you delivered. I wonder how did they become friends, I'm worried about her father and his presence in her life. I wonder about the fact that she cares still.
I kept Imre close, and oh my that boy is no less insane than mc. Is that allowed to say? Golden boy, pillar of community and absolutely manipulative egotistical lad.
Lorcan scared the hell out of me in the very beginning, but not now. I will try his route next.
Sally is the most heavy topic for me. And this fact, well, it makes me think about my family situation. I'm thankful for that too.
Joke on me, I'm so emotionally invested into this story. All thanks to your skills as a writer. It's haunted, it's morbid, it's fun. It's insightful in a way that I did not expect. So. Good luck to you! Hope to read more.
stillwaitingforanupdate. Can't wait to kiss lorcan or we finally do something with the sexual tension
Choose the mean flirt options then walk home with him😏
I did.hehehehe
"In my restless dreams I see that town..."
Anyway, just wanted to say that this is really, really good, the MC is so incredibly well written, it's rare we get such a treat in a CYOA where the protagonist is an actual part of the narrative instead of just a vehicle through which we experience it. I'm looking forward to more chapters, that cliffhanger was something else!
Silent Hill ;)
I don't understand does it end 0n turn 195 after it says "One day your son will do something you won't be able to save him from.", because after that it's just a blank box? Otherwise very well done. And if it doesn't end there(as it's in episode 3 and isn't there 5 episode), is there a way to fix it? Thanks!
yes so there was a twine update that messed up existing code (it's very annoying that it does that) but I'll get to this week and make a post here to announce it when it's done!
Thanks for letting me know
GODDDD I just finished the most recent chapter and I’ve gone over all the routes like 5 times, Imre takes the cake though, he’s so interesting and I can’t wait too see more of him, he’s so complex (extremely fine too) and I love it. Great writing!! Kudos to you for all of these updates big and small, thank you for your hard work, looking forward to the next one!
what's the code to the next chapter?or i should joined patreon first
Finally. FINALLY. NIA.
I feel like there’s so many moments with the boys, and I get it when ol’ girl is purposely avoiding MC, but their Complicated is *delicious* - and I have been Waiting for this sort of scene between them for so. Damn. Long. And you delivered: The imagery, the tension, (the inevitable, incomprehensible flirting?) Fabulous. I even did another run to see what her rivalmance is like — and I love them both. Seeing Nia give anything - More than apathy is something me and MC *both* crave, yet never expect. Gotta love it when the childhood friend hurts the most…. Thanks for the meal (literal and figurative)~
I don't think I've commented on this IF before so I really want to give it the praise it deserveS
You are an incredible writer! I love how personable the dialogue options are for the MC and how distinct it sets them apart from everyone in the cast
I love the ad segments I got a real good laugh at the lice reveal for this new update and I hope they've been a fun for you to write like they are for me to read them!!
The one last thing I'll say is that it's really understated at times just how amazing you writers are for creating IF mainly for free so I give you a million thankyous for sharing your story with us!
I saw this error when you walking home in rain storm Error: child tag <</if>> was found outside of a call to its parent macro <<if>>
thank you! I do ask that any errors are sent to tumblr since I don’t check these comments much
oh sorry XD I will remember that for next time
When's a updat? T^T I come check every day to see if there's an update.
I don't know, writing plus going to school makes me not know when. Hopefully I'll update it sometime this month