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The first sentence reads, "Vaccination policy is the health policy that governments adopt in relation to vaccination." In my opinion it is not written according to [[MOS:LEADSENTENCE]], which states, "Keep the first sentence focused on the subject by avoiding constructions like "[Subject] refers to..." or "...is a word for..." – the article is about the subject, not a term for the subject". Also, it has repeated words unnecessarily. According to MasterClass staff, "When you’re not using repetition as a rhetorical device, repeating words can get in the way of good writing."<ref>{{cite web |url = https://www.masterclass.com/articles/tips-for-avoiding-word-repetition-in-your-writing#3-tips-for-avoiding-word-repetition|title = 3 Tips for Avoiding Word Repetition in Your Writing {{pipe}} MasterClass|date = Aug 24, 2021|access-date = 4 January 2022|url-status = live}}</ref> |
The first sentence reads, "Vaccination policy is the health policy that governments adopt in relation to vaccination." In my opinion it is not written according to [[MOS:LEADSENTENCE]], which states, "Keep the first sentence focused on the subject by avoiding constructions like "[Subject] refers to..." or "...is a word for..." – the article is about the subject, not a term for the subject". Also, it has repeated words unnecessarily. According to MasterClass staff, "When you’re not using repetition as a rhetorical device, repeating words can get in the way of good writing."<ref>{{cite web |url = https://www.masterclass.com/articles/tips-for-avoiding-word-repetition-in-your-writing#3-tips-for-avoiding-word-repetition|title = 3 Tips for Avoiding Word Repetition in Your Writing {{pipe}} MasterClass|date = Aug 24, 2021|access-date = 4 January 2022|url-status = live}}</ref> <!-- Template:Unsigned --><span class="autosigned" style="font-size:85%;">— Preceding [[Wikipedia:Signatures|unsigned]] comment added by [[User:Thinker78|Thinker78]] ([[User talk:Thinker78#top|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/Thinker78|contribs]]) 17:58, 4 January 2022 (UTC)</span> |
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* I changed it to : "'''Vaccination policy''' is a kind of [[health policy]] that governments adopt in order to prevent the spread of [[infectious disease]] through [[vaccination]]". To be clear, "policy" is repeated in the sentence because vaccination policy is a subset of health policy, and we have to properly identify this relationship, and "vaccination" is repeated in the sentence because it would be weird not to have [[vaccination]] linked in the first sentence of the article. [[User:BD2412|<span style="background:gold">'''''BD2412'''''</span>]] [[User talk:BD2412|'''T''']] 06:12, 5 January 2022 (UTC) |
* I changed it to : "'''Vaccination policy''' is a kind of [[health policy]] that governments adopt in order to prevent the spread of [[infectious disease]] through [[vaccination]]". To be clear, "policy" is repeated in the sentence because vaccination policy is a subset of health policy, and we have to properly identify this relationship, and "vaccination" is repeated in the sentence because it would be weird not to have [[vaccination]] linked in the first sentence of the article. [[User:BD2412|<span style="background:gold">'''''BD2412'''''</span>]] [[User talk:BD2412|'''T''']] 06:12, 5 January 2022 (UTC) |
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** A nice monster for you. {{talkquote|[[Chickbox vaccination]] would leave unvaccinated children susceptible to contracting chickenpox as adults, when they're more likely to develop a more severe infection or a secondary complication, or in pregnancy, when there's a risk of the infection harming the baby.}} from https://www.nhs.uk/conditions/vaccinations/chickenpox-vaccine-questions-answers/ . The UK vaccination policy for chickenbox is to... not vaccinate most people to avoid herd immunity, so as to cause childhood infection so as to decrease adult morbidity. Do we consider this consistent with the lead and do we care [[User:Talpedia|Talpedia]] ([[User talk:Talpedia|talk]]) 10:52, 5 January 2022 (UTC) |
** A nice monster for you. {{talkquote|[[Chickbox vaccination]] would leave unvaccinated children susceptible to contracting chickenpox as adults, when they're more likely to develop a more severe infection or a secondary complication, or in pregnancy, when there's a risk of the infection harming the baby.}} from https://www.nhs.uk/conditions/vaccinations/chickenpox-vaccine-questions-answers/ . The UK vaccination policy for chickenbox is to... not vaccinate most people to avoid herd immunity, so as to cause childhood infection so as to decrease adult morbidity. Do we consider this consistent with the lead and do we care [[User:Talpedia|Talpedia]] ([[User talk:Talpedia|talk]]) 10:52, 5 January 2022 (UTC) |
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Compulsory COVID-19 vaccination in table: highly dubious
As of 08:07, 26 July 2021 (UTC) the table says that COVID-19 vaccinations are mandatory in Cyprus, Saudi Arabia, Kazakhstan, Indonesia, and a few other places, in some cases with no reference, and in others with a reference from 2019 or older, before COVID-19 pandemic even won the title debate against 2019–20 Wuhan coronavirus outbreak and its successors... I don't have the time to fix this right now - feel free to do so! Boud (talk) 08:07, 26 July 2021 (UTC)
- Yes indeed, what are the sources for these countries? This somewhat older source says 3 countries have it: The Countries Where Vaccination Is Mandatory and here a more recent source Factbox: Countries making COVID-19 vaccines mandatory. Some countries where not correct so I corrected it. --PJ Geest (talk) 20:04, 18 November 2021 (UTC)
- Should we include Austria already? --2A02:2C40:100:B209:0:0:1:F7CC (talk) 17:02, 19 November 2021 (UTC)
Australia
In the overview table, Mumps and MR are marked as "NO", but should be "RA": see the cited reference 65 (given at 12 and 18 months). — Preceding unsigned comment added by 121.44.9.47 (talk) 09:22, 1 August 2021 (UTC)
Fixed — Guarapiranga ☎ 10:52, 3 August 2021 (UTC)
First sentence
The first sentence reads, "Vaccination policy is the health policy that governments adopt in relation to vaccination." In my opinion it is not written according to MOS:LEADSENTENCE, which states, "Keep the first sentence focused on the subject by avoiding constructions like "[Subject] refers to..." or "...is a word for..." – the article is about the subject, not a term for the subject". Also, it has repeated words unnecessarily. According to MasterClass staff, "When you’re not using repetition as a rhetorical device, repeating words can get in the way of good writing."[1] — Preceding unsigned comment added by Thinker78 (talk • contribs) 17:58, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
- I changed it to : "Vaccination policy is a kind of health policy that governments adopt in order to prevent the spread of infectious disease through vaccination". To be clear, "policy" is repeated in the sentence because vaccination policy is a subset of health policy, and we have to properly identify this relationship, and "vaccination" is repeated in the sentence because it would be weird not to have vaccination linked in the first sentence of the article. BD2412 T 06:12, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
- A nice monster for you.
from https://www.nhs.uk/conditions/vaccinations/chickenpox-vaccine-questions-answers/ . The UK vaccination policy for chickenbox is to... not vaccinate most people to avoid herd immunity, so as to cause childhood infection so as to decrease adult morbidity. Do we consider this consistent with the lead and do we care Talpedia (talk) 10:52, 5 January 2022 (UTC)Chickbox vaccination would leave unvaccinated children susceptible to contracting chickenpox as adults, when they're more likely to develop a more severe infection or a secondary complication, or in pregnancy, when there's a risk of the infection harming the baby.
- I am not particularly moved by that outlier. BD2412 T 17:06, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
- A nice monster for you.
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In schools and daycares
- I found that a sentence referenced a similarity and also slight variation in two percentages. The observation was correct but no sources were cited therefore I added on two citations to support the point made regarding the vaccination rates in European Countries versus the United states.Bmschultz (talk) 02:53, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
Compulsory Vaccination
- It appeared that multiple sentences throughout this portion had a slight bias towards mandates not being necessary due to the success rates of countries beyond the United States. The evidence provided was all backed up and correct, however it didn't seem to explore the opposite side of said argument, nor stay neutral. I am unsure of how to reword these portions to be less swaying to one side or the other therefore I have not directly edited them. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bmschultz (talk • contribs) 02:58, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
Herd Immunity
- I read the given explanation for herd immunity and upon looking at various sources decided an unmentioned yet important part of what hat phrase describes and effects. Therefore, I took it upon myself to mention the intended result of herd immunity was to lessen the effect of a contagious pathogen has on a society.Bmschultz (talk) 03:07, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
Introduction
Could use some citing on the second paragraph. B7lam916 (talk) 23:05, 24 April 2022 (UTC)