Academic Argument, Ryan Leibold

Assignment 3c: Academic Argument Peer Review Form
Writer: Ryan Leibold

Writer Email: rleibold@rams.colostate.edu
Reviewer:
Reviewer Email:
Instructions: Carefully read through your peer’s entire Academic Argument once. After doing so, type/write your
answers into this form and add any handwritten notes to the draft provided to you by your peer. You must do both.
Then, this assignment can be submitted in one of two ways:

1. Print out the completed form and bring it to class on Wednesday along with the hard copy drafts for each of
your peers. (If you cannot attend Wednesday’s class, you must email this completed form to your peer
before class begins.) OR
2. If your group agrees: you can email the completed sheets to each other, BUT you must include me (on the
email or you will not get credit. You will also need to have your computer in class on Wednesday to access
the worksheets.
You do not need to upload the worksheets to Canvas.
Introduction
1. Does the introduction provide a brief explanation of the issue so that the average person (not an expert) could
understand it? What else do you need or want to know? Note: Some of this context may be in the first body
paragraph, especially if it’s a complicated issue. Read that and offer any suggestions for further clarifications, too.
The introduction provides a great amount of information to the reader about to what the paper’s topic is.
Maybe if anything, shorten sentences, lots of run on sentences. All in all though, the introduction is in great
shape.
2. Does the author have a clear, direct thesis statement? Can you figure out what their position is on the issue? If
not, what can they do to make their position more clear? Can the be rephrased to be more direct, more clear, or
more forceful? Offer specific suggestions to your peer here.
Ryan poses a great thesis statement to his audience, “ The role of siblings, both older and younger, differ
between families, but they often involve teaching the children how to work in teams and how to behave in
social settings.” Ryan then supports his thesis using factual evidence at the end of the introduction.
Body Paragraphs
1. How many body paragraphs does this essay have? Is each one focused on just one reason that supports the
argument? Make a note here if any of the body paragraphs are a) missing a reason, b) have an unclear reason, or c)
have too many reasons.
Ryan’s paper consists of three body paragraphs, each of which are dedicated to a separate supporting claims
and evidence. Ryan clearly addresses what is being discussed in each paragraph.
2. Review all of the body paragraphs and list below all of the reasons that support your peer’s argument.
Remember, there should be one per body paragraph, including in the counterargument paragraph. Does each reason
have an explicit connection to your peer’s thesis statement? If not, make a note for your peer explaining that they
need to make those connections more explicit.
1. “Children with siblings have higher abilities to solve problems effectively.”

2. “Increase child’s cooperative abilities.”
3. “Positive social skills on brothers and sisters.”
3. What kind of evidence does your peer use? How many pieces of evidence do they use in each body paragraph
(count it up!). Are there any paragraphs where your peer needs more evidence? Why? Explain how you think the
additional evidence would help their argument.
Ryan uses about one quote, providing evidence to his thesis. Maybe add one more piece of evidence to each
paragraph?
4. Look for the counterargument paragraph. Is the counterargument clearly presented as someone else’s argument?
Does it oppose your peer’s argument? (It should!) Is it introduced neutrally?
Your counter argument doesn’t really go into what his counterargument is. Elaborate more on your
counterargument.
4. What is your peer’s response to the counterargument? Does your peer include an acknowledgment of the
counterargument’s validity? A transition using “but” or “however”? And a clear rebuttal of the
counterargument that further supports your peer’s thesis?
Your view on the counterargument seems very strong, and backed up by factual evidence.
6. This is quite possibly the most important question: do you see any errors in logical thinking or any jumps in
reasoning here? Are there any places where you got confused? Any places where your peer needs to explain their
ideas more explicitly? Admitting this won’t hurt your peer’s feelings, but it will help them improve their essay
before the final draft.
If anything, I would clean up the counter argument, but besides that, this is a very well-rounded essay.
Conclusion
1. Look at the conclusion. Does your peer restate their thesis in new words? If your peer uses the same wording,
can you offer a suggestion for how they might reword their thesis?
Ryan presents his thesis in a different way compared to his introduction. He finishes his conclusion strong.
Use of Sources
1. Does the author use at least four different sources? Are they used in relation to each other in order to
establish a conversation? Why or why not?
Yes, and yes, each subject directly relates to the overall personal benefits one receives from a sibling.
2. How effectively does the writer use voice markers and the quotation sandwich? On the draft, note any places
where the writer needs to more clearly identify the speaker of the quote or provide more explanation for a quote.
Quotation sandwiches are great,
Moving Forward
List 2 things your peer did well:
1. Provide a strong thesis statement

2. Connect his thesis to four other sources that provide supporting evidence to his claim.
List the 2 most important issues for your peer to fix. (The assignment instructions show what is most important
when it comes to grading; use that to help you identify the changes that would most help your peer improve their
essay and get a better grade):
Maybe shorten sentences into more concise ones, and add a few more quotes or pieces of evidence in each
paragraph.

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Assignment 3c: Academic Argument Peer Review Form

Writer: Ryan Leibold

Then, this assignment can be submitted in one of two ways:

1. “Children with siblings have higher abilities to solve problems effectively.”

Quotation sandwiches are great,

1. Provide a strong thesis statement

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