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A fact from JoAnne S. Bass appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 14 August 2020 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that today, JoAnne S. Bass becomes not only the first female senior enlisted member of any U.S. military branch, but also the first person of Asian descent to hold that position in the Air Force?

A record of the entry may be seen at Wikipedia:Recent additions/2020/August. The nomination discussion and review may be seen at Template:Did you know nominations/JoAnne S. Bass.

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The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 00:13, 10 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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CMSgt of the Air Force JoAnne S. Bass

... that JoAnne S. Bass (pictured) will be the first female senior enlisted member of any branch of the American military and the first person of Asian descent to hold that position in the Air Force? Source: [1] [2][3]

Reviewed: Deutsches Reichsbräu

Created by Seven Pandas (talk). Self-nominated at 17:26, 20 June 2020 (UTC).[reply]

ALT0a ... that JoAnne S. Bass (pictured) is not only the first female senior enlisted member of any US military branch but also the first person of Asian descent to hold that position in the Air Force? Source: [4] [5][6] NOTE: REQUEST AUG 14, 2020 if that is possible.

ALT0b ... that today JoAnne S. Bass (pictured) became not only the first female senior enlisted member of any US military branch but also the first person of Asian descent to hold that position in the Air Force? Source: [7] [8][9] NOTE: ALT REQUESTED, slated for AUG 14, 2020.

ALT1 ~~... that on August 11, JoAnne S. Bass (pictured) of Mililani, Hawaii, will become the first female and first Asian Chief Master Sergeant of the Air Force?~~

and depending on when this runs ...

ALT2 ~~... that Chief Master Sergeant of the Air Force JoAnne S. Bass (pictured) of Mililani, Hawaii, was part of Operation Southern Watch?~~

Here is the source for both ALT1 and ALT2 [4] — Maile (talk) 18:05, 20 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Starting review —valereee (talk) 13:57, 21 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

Image: Image is freely licensed, used in the article, and clear at 100px.
Freely licensed: Used in article: Clear at 100px:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: —valereee (talk) 13:57, 21 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Good to go. ALT0 just makes it under 200. I usually am not a fan of 'first woman' hooks as I always wonder if there isn't something more interesting about the person, but in this case this is a huge frickin' deal, so I'm going to state a preference for ALT0 followed by ALT1. I actually think you could make either more interesting and feel less wordy by tweaking the cast to 'that bass is not only the first woman to x, but also the first person of'; if you'd like to suggest an ALT0a and ALT1a with that tweak, ping me and I'll come back. Nice work on your first article! I see that she's due to be promoted August 14, I think you could request this run that day. If you want to make that request, leave a note here for the promoter. —valereee (talk) 15:25, 21 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Valereee: Thank you for your review and tweaks. I like the wording you suggest and made ALT0a. I also request Aug 14 if that is possible. Seven Pandas (talk) 16:41, 21 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

ALT0a also approved after a tweak to shorten to under 200 characters. Promoter note nom's IAR date request. —valereee (talk) 16:52, 21 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Seven Pandas, I've moved this to the special event holding area to run on Aug. 14. Can you please prepare a ALT wording for "today" since it'll run the day she's promoted? The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 04:50, 22 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- User:The Squirrel Conspiracy User:Valereee see ALT0b Seven Pandas (talk) 12:21, 22 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Approving ALT0b. --—valereee (talk) 12:40, 22 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I've struck the unused hooks, and suggest this grammar tweak for ALT0b:
ALT0b-a: ... that today JoAnne S. Bass (pictured) becomes not only the first female senior enlisted member of any US military branch, but also the first person of Asian descent to hold that position in the Air Force? Yoninah (talk) 11:38, 6 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Approving ALT0b-a —valereee (talk) 14:34, 6 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"First female senior enlisted member of any U.S. military branch" ?

What about Rear Admiral Grace Hopper of the U.S. Navy ?

Just curious. 2600:8800:784:8F00:C23F:D5FF:FEC4:D51D (talk) 12:59, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know nomination

"First female senior enlisted member of any U.S. military branch" ?

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