A poem/ rap I made Please tell me if it makes sense or if it's good

I wrote this song, it’s supposed to be a rap song, and I wanted everyone’s opinion. If you want to read the rest there is a board called mine you can go to.

When a rap reaches out and captivates, when a verse hits your ears like a heavyweight, when the audience is so amazed they can't think straight, it may seem impossible for you to replicate this admirable state. But you can't despair if you...

Truth

Like i tell alot of people... 2pac is one of the rappers i really look up too and i was writing a verse to his " I get Around" track

Rap Words That Rhyme With Me

Want to hear a funny joke? Paying for higher education, buying a house, and affording to raise a family in this economy!