Very promising and I love it! im so excited to pursue Kelsey the loser geek x popular jock (and one that's in a "relationship") is just to good to pass by for mc (im especially curious how it'll go when roles are swapped)
Also a bit funny but while playing I decided to do chores so I had a nice cackle when I read this
Your Episode 1 runtime was 01:16:55 (1 hours, 16 minutes, and 55 seconds).
I'm completely blown away by the depth and the writing! I couldn't say no to bringing Checl with me (my MC is gonna need someone optimistic and kind for a whole lot of pain he's probably gonna put himself and others through LOL) also related but I love my sweet puppy (I named him Good Boy because that's what he is while being a terrifying beast 🥺)
And I'm very curious how the future encounter with Tsering will go (as of this point my MC just wants to shoot him in the leg and push him off a bridge - you don't get the amount of past vulnerability shown to you without a price LOL) I know we got some lovers of him currently tho so maybe that'll change~
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Also I would sorta be repeating myself but since Lunan said they've recently thought about selling the full game and writing with that goal in mind I'll leave that discussion and thought process for them (lord knows I'm never gonna make an IF myself lol)
I will say the last few parts of your criticisms seem highly unnecessary - because the IF is currently free (and free games or books etc. will be quite unprofessional) also most IF authors I've seen who charge anything have a patreon (that the author doesn't have) which you opt into for bonus content
The most I've seen an IF go for is 12$ (I think authors deserve more but that's besides the point) and that's on the high end
Which is all to say whatever prices the author 'would' charge you'd get about what you'd pay for but the author isn't charging anything so it's not worth speculating on
Honestly with all the criticisms in the comments I was expecting more of a bite to this IF lol
Overall I like it I actually think the companions can be quite nice in their own ways despite reading comments saying their only mean - like Nash off the bat is a sweetheart - in the beginning Leanna is just trying to work things out in the moment to survive so she comes off as "harsh" but literally right after Rohan is being a prick (which they fully send him off as to break off the tension) she comes to the MC and directly shows cares for how they feel
The alien (sorry can't remember their name) is stand offish but it's shown they clearly have a good heart 1) because their being hunted/exiled from their kind and 2) they show a clear care for joia's whole being and they even explain their reasoning for not trusting us at the start which the MC shares mutually back because their an alien lol
I like Rohan as a character I think he's the foil to the MC and it could be the Luka alien stage lover in me but I like that bit of toxicity - I recall seeing a comment asking why anyone would ever romance him and its the same reason people play IF where you can be a murderer/villain - and as a sidenote I felt like the whole "surgery" and forced tranquilizer was way more traumatizing then the intercourse (but maybe its diff if you dont choose to sleep with rohan I'll have to see)
so good your writing has my stomach in knots sometimes I cant get enough man and I love having my stubborn lil man tell flea to stay like his puppy dog earnest is something the incubus cant say no to LOL
as a sidenote im really happy I was able to guess the culprit for the new case idk made me feel a lil smart
I don't think I've commented on this IF before so I really want to give it the praise it deserveS
You are an incredible writer! I love how personable the dialogue options are for the MC and how distinct it sets them apart from everyone in the cast
I love the ad segments I got a real good laugh at the lice reveal for this new update and I hope they've been a fun for you to write like they are for me to read them!!
The one last thing I'll say is that it's really understated at times just how amazing you writers are for creating IF mainly for free so I give you a million thankyous for sharing your story with us!
Oh haha I was not expecting to see the IF here but it's a very happy surprise!! I still really like this story (idk if you'd recall me author but I was the anon on Tumblr who problem solved the riddle section using Google doc LOL -)
Also I recall you liking sunflowers? So here's one for you 🌻 ty again for publishing your story here
Writing this to say to all the people in the comments 'mourning' over this wip
PLEASE consider supporting acedog on kofi! I'm sure he would love to continue working on this story but a writer can't write if their struggling with bills!
And if you can't support financially consider spreading his Tumblr posts or even sending him a nice message!
leaving a note in the off chance a random book reader prefers a review before they're comfortable enough to purchase
and I want to say that Beau past and present work are amazing, the characters are so very personable and each different setting of sci-fi to fantasy are so immersive
Im not a writer myself so I cant give my own review justice but im thankful to beau not only as a trans person but as a reader too
(and just as a PS but its criminal that my man cant charge more for his work SMH so maybe support him on patreon)
Hiii I dont want to ramble for to long but this IF is already so lovely to start as soon as I saw it was gonna be a sorta found family type and in the ol west I was hooked - One thing I already need to comment on (to hopefully be added for future developments but of course no rush <33) is font size options I could already tell my eyes were gonna strain reading this and I want to digest all your beautiful words in the next chapter without it!!
hello love the game if I hadnt said it before and I dont know anything about coding so def take my idea with a grain of salt
but maybe when are mom first texts us it can have a pop up for her we can select like
"happy birthday! (son or daughter)" which will then signify mc pronouns? again have no clue if that can be implemented and if it cant you've done a lot to be inclusive so thankyou~
