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This document provides tips and examples for using "showing, not telling" to improve narrative essay writing. It explains that showing uses vivid details and imagery to engage the reader rather than just stating facts. Examples are given of rewriting sentences from telling to showing, such as "the girls were excited" becoming "giggles and screams filled the arrival hall." The document also provides tips for writing more complex sentences and constructing short narratives. Students are encouraged to write from their own experiences and knowledge to produce original work.

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Writing

This document provides tips and examples for using "showing, not telling" to improve narrative essay writing. It explains that showing uses vivid details and imagery to engage the reader rather than just stating facts. Examples are given of rewriting sentences from telling to showing, such as "the girls were excited" becoming "giggles and screams filled the arrival hall." The document also provides tips for writing more complex sentences and constructing short narratives. Students are encouraged to write from their own experiences and knowledge to produce original work.

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ENGLISH LANGUAGE the walls and to the silhouettes once covered by pictures.

Faded and torn white sheets covered the furniture now


CONTINUOUS WRITING drowning in dust.
Telling: The pizza was delicious.
Showing: Steam rising up off the melted cheese made
An 'A'script has the following features:
my mouth water. At the first bite, my teeth sinked into
the cheese through the tomato sauce and into the moist
1 accurate language - few slips only, no serious errors
crust. I chew and swallow rapidly. Even the cheese and
like errors in tenses
tomato sauce, sticking to my fingertips, begged to be
2 accurate spelling across the board
licked.
3 precise vocabulary - do not be too obsessed with
idioms and flowery phrases. many students use
Telling: She is angry.
bombastic words but it is not suitable.
Showing: Her hands held tightly to the sides of her table.
4 interesting and original...write from the heart
Her jaw tightened. Her eyes flashed heat waves at me.
5 correct tone - if it is formal, then use a formal tone, if
She hissed at me, "I want to see you outside, right now."
it is a friendly letter, then it should sound informal...
Now, try to do the following:
Answering your questions Telling: The morning was beautiful.
Showing:
If you are good in English, try to write an original
piece instead of memorising. If someone else happens to
write the same essay or if the examiner has read it Telling: The meal was delicious.
before, then, you might get lower marks. Showing:
Some students memorise essays and produce a perfect
piece. However, when examiners read their directed From Basic To Complex
writing, their language is not as good as the continuous
writing. Therefore, your marks for continuous writing In order to write a good essay, students should learn how
will be lowered.
to write complex sentences.
Continuous Writing Tips:
1. Take a basic sentence:
1 Do not memorise whole essays and try to fit it into the Julie lost her bag.
given titles. You may try to memorise certain phrases or
interesting introductions but if your language does not 2. Expand on it: (add an adjective)
match the directed writing, your marks will be pulled Julie lost her pink handbag.
down.
3. Expand again with additional information:
2 Write about what you know. For example, if your
interest is football, then write a story about football. If Julie lost her pink handbag in a bus station.
you like Korean drama, write something Korean, making
use of your knowledge and vocabulary. Originality will 4. Combine two sentences:
get you more marks. Julie lost her pink handbag. She was waiting for her bus.
Julie lost her pink handbag while waiting for her bus.
3 If you are quite weak in narrative writing, go for Julie lost her pink handbag while waiting for her bus at
the reflective or factual essays.
the bus station.
Topics: How can I help save the environment?
What are the changes I would like to see in my school? 5. Make substitutions:
Julie lost her handbag ...
Show, Not Tell Juan lost her mobile phone...etc.

One of the ways to write better narrative essays is to use 6. Add information and construct a short narrative
the technique - Show,Not Tell around the sentences students have created:
Below are some examples which I have adapted from the Julie was waiting for her bus at the bus station when she
internet. lost her handbag. She also lost her mobile phone and
everything else in the handbag.
Telling: The girls were excited.
Showing: Giggles and screams filled the arrival hall.
Their hair were now damp with perspiration. They held
tight to each other, trying to contain themselves. The Now, try expanding the following sentences.
moment was here.
1 She likes to play badminton.
Telling: The room was vacant.
Showing: The door opened with a resounding echo that
seemed to fill the house. Cob webs once attached flowed 2 Cigarette smoking is hazardous to health.
freely in the air. The light revealed the peeling paint on
3 A thief entered my house.

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