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    The chart shows the percentage of adults in different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003 to 2006, with overall usage increasing each year except for the youngest group which declined slightly in 2006. While those aged 16-24 had the highest rates of daily Internet use, peaking at 100% in 2005, adults over 65 always had usage rates below 20%. The data also demonstrates that Internet popularity generally decreased with age, with percentages ranging from 80% to 50% for ages 25-54, around 50% for ages 55-64, and under 20% for those over 65.

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    The chart shows the percentage of adults in different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003 to 2006, with overall usage increasing each year except for the youngest group which declined slightly in 2006. While those aged 16-24 had the highest rates of daily Internet use, peaking at 100% in 2005, adults over 65 always had usage rates below 20%. The data also demonstrates that Internet popularity generally decreased with age, with percentages ranging from 80% to 50% for ages 25-54, around 50% for ages 55-64, and under 20% for those over 65.

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    The chart shows the percentage of adults in different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003 to 2006, with overall usage increasing each year except for the youngest group which declined slightly in 2006. While those aged 16-24 had the highest rates of daily Internet use, peaking at 100% in 2005, adults over 65 always had usage rates below 20%. The data also demonstrates that Internet popularity generally decreased with age, with percentages ranging from 80% to 50% for ages 25-54, around 50% for ages 55-64, and under 20% for those over 65.

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    The chart shows the percentage of adults in different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003 to 2006, with overall usage increasing each year except for the youngest group which declined slightly in 2006. While those aged 16-24 had the highest rates of daily Internet use, peaking at 100% in 2005, adults over 65 always had usage rates below 20%. The data also demonstrates that Internet popularity generally decreased with age, with percentages ranging from 80% to 50% for ages 25-54, around 50% for ages 55-64, and under 20% for those over 65.

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    Task 1: The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age in the UK who used the Internet

    everyday from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make
    comparisons where relevant.

    The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people from five age brackets living in the United Kingdom, those people
    who used the Internet daily between 2003 and 2006.

    Overall, there was an upward trend in the percentage of people using the Internet day-to-day in five all age
    categories during the four years, except for the youngest group, which declined in the final year. While the
    youngest group had the highest number [be very careful, the graph is not showing you numbers] share of users,
    the oldest group had the lowest least number. In general, the older people were, the less likely they were to use
    they used the Internet.

    Looking first at the three groups with the majority of Internet users, a larger proportion of the youngest people
    [you have not explained what the youngest group is] used the Internet than others, reaching a high point at 100%
    in 2005, but had dropped to 90% by 2006. In terms of the others age brackets [again, you have not given any
    indication of these age groups], they both each of them increased gradually from around 50% to 80% over the
    period shown.

    In contrast, not as many people from 55 to over 65 years old used the Internet as younger people. As for the 55-64
    age category, more or less an equal rate of around 30% [instead of just talking about it, give the data!] number of
    people went online from 2003 to 2005, but that climbed up to about 50% in 2006. The Internet was least popular
    with the oldest group, which always remained below 20%.
    Estimated
    Grade
    Task 5-6  150 -190 words
    Achieve- 205
    ment  overall summary
    good, apart from some wording errors
     all key data covered / data is highlighted well
    major error here - you have not introduced what the three different age groups
    are in the first body paragraph
    also, you must stop writing about percentages as numbers, that is incorrect

    not much data in the final paragraph


     data is reported accurately

    Cohesion 7  logical separation of data into paragraphs


    and
    Coherence  body paragraphs start with a phrase that indicates the data in the paragraph

     logical paragraph development


    I have lowered your score in task response for this, but please note that by not
    introducing the age groups, it is a problem for cohesion and coherence also
     linking phrases are used well

    Vocabulary 6  appropriate word choices / control of word endings/forms


    Errors and changes are highlighted in yellow

    if you are writing about % then please only use


    rate/share/proportion/percentage
     spelling is correct

    Grammar 7  articles (a, an, the)

     sentence structures are correct


    Errors and changes are highlighted in green

    Overall 6-6.5 some major errors here which you must avoid in the future - you must clearly
    identify the different age categories, and you must clear up your wording around
    percentages
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