STAAR English I Admin April 2018 Released
STAAR English I Admin April 2018 Released
STAAR English I Admin April 2018 Released
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the answer on your answer document.
Caitlyn wrote the following composition about an inspirational figure. She would like
you to read her paper and think about any corrections she needs to make. When you
finish reading, answer the questions that follow.
A Dream Unrealized
(1) Rafael, or Rafa, Ortiz was born in Mexico City, but his father did not want
to raise him in the midst of the city’s tall buildings and concrete streets. (2) He
wanted his children to be close to nature and animals, so when Rafa Ortiz was about
five years old, his father moved his family to a ranch near Veracruz. (3) Rafa Ortiz
and his siblings began water rafting in the nearby Filobobos River. (4) Over time
Ortiz’s early experiences with rafting led him to an extraordinary career in extreme
kayaking.
(5) When Ortiz was about 14, his father and sister bought two kayaks.
(6) With no instructions or guidence, Ortiz and his sister planned to take their new
boats out onto the water. (7) They put on skateboarding helmets and swimming pool
life jackets and brought their kayaks to the river. (8) Fortunately, an experienced
kayaker saw them and offered some much-needed advice. (9) “You guys need
proper life jackets, proper helmets, and proper spray skirts to close the kayaks,” he
gently told them. (10) “You can visit a website and get all set up.” (11) The two
siblings did just that, and Ortiz soon became an avid kayaker. (12) He started
spending his summers in Canada, where he perfected his skills in freestyle kayaking.
(13) As a teen in the junior ranks, Ortiz became the first Mexican of any age to
(14) Ortiz soon grew interested in extreme kayaking and made his first
descent down a 40-foot drop over Big Banana Falls in Mexico. (15) He came out of
the plunge bleeding and with a broken paddle, but he was hooked nonetheless.
(16) After steady practice and a great deal of experience at various waterfalls around
the globe, Ortiz improved his skills. (17) Today he is one of the most celebrated
paddling his kayak over both the Alexander Falls, a 150-foot drop in British
Columbia, and the Palouse Falls, a 189-foot drop in the state of Washington.
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Larry Clouse/ Associated Press
Rafael Ortiz Kayaking on
Homestake Creek in Vail, Colorado
(19) In recent years Ortiz had been looking forward to conquering the
ultimate challenge, the 165-foot plummet of Niagara Falls. (20) He had already
conquered a higher drop, but Niagara has the highest flow rate of any waterfall in the
world, so Ortiz knew the feat would be more perilous than anything he had
attempted before. (21) Still Ortiz dreamed of being the first kayaker to paddle over
the falls. (22) Hoping to be as prepared as possible for a challenge that he knew
(23) But Ortiz would never conquer that ultimate challenge. (24) On the day
that he was supposed to paddle over Niagara Falls, he went to the top and looked
down, he said that things just didn’t feel right. (25) So in a move that surprised
many, he simply walked away. (26) After three years of preparation, Rafa Ortiz left
his biggest dream behind. (27) He later explained that he just wasn’t confident he
would be able to land the kayak safe. (28) “Not often it hurts so much to walk away
from a dream,” he said. (29) But he added, “I heard once [that] sometimes it takes
(30) Other extreme kayakers agree and have praised Rafa Ortiz’s decision.
(31) Fellow kayaker Rush Sturges is one example. (32) “I am proud of Rafa’s
courage.”
(33) So for now Rafa Ortiz will have to be happy with all the other amazing
feats he has accomplished. (34) As one writer put it, “Surely another waterfall
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14 What change should be made in sentence 6?
F On the day that he was supposed to paddle over Niagara Falls. He went to the top, looked
down, and said that things just didn’t feel right.
G On the day that he was supposed to paddle over Niagara Falls, he went to the top and
looked down. He said that things just didn’t feel right.
H On the day that he was supposed to paddle over Niagara Falls, he went to the top and
looked down. And said that things just didn’t feel right.
J On the day that he was supposed to paddle. Over Niagara falls, he went to the top, looked
down, and said things just didn’t feel right.
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17 What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 27?