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    This draft persuasive essay argues that intelligent machines should not replace human labor. It introduces the topic and states that the advancement of technology is negatively impacting people's daily lives and work. The first body paragraph claims that intelligent machines will lead to large job losses, citing a study that found 400-800 million people could be displaced. The second body paragraph acknowledges the counterargument that machines allow work to be done faster but responds that those jobs could be performed by multiple humans, creating new opportunities. The conclusion restates that robots should not replace human work since it affects people's economic, social, and mental lives and their families.

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    This draft persuasive essay argues that intelligent machines should not replace human labor. It introduces the topic and states that the advancement of technology is negatively impacting people's daily lives and work. The first body paragraph claims that intelligent machines will lead to large job losses, citing a study that found 400-800 million people could be displaced. The second body paragraph acknowledges the counterargument that machines allow work to be done faster but responds that those jobs could be performed by multiple humans, creating new opportunities. The conclusion restates that robots should not replace human work since it affects people's economic, social, and mental lives and their families.

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    This draft persuasive essay argues that intelligent machines should not replace human labor. It introduces the topic and states that the advancement of technology is negatively impacting people's daily lives and work. The first body paragraph claims that intelligent machines will lead to large job losses, citing a study that found 400-800 million people could be displaced. The second body paragraph acknowledges the counterargument that machines allow work to be done faster but responds that those jobs could be performed by multiple humans, creating new opportunities. The conclusion restates that robots should not replace human work since it affects people's economic, social, and mental lives and their families.

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    This draft persuasive essay argues that intelligent machines should not replace human labor. It introduces the topic and states that the advancement of technology is negatively impacting people's daily lives and work. The first body paragraph claims that intelligent machines will lead to large job losses, citing a study that found 400-800 million people could be displaced. The second body paragraph acknowledges the counterargument that machines allow work to be done faster but responds that those jobs could be performed by multiple humans, creating new opportunities. The conclusion restates that robots should not replace human work since it affects people's economic, social, and mental lives and their families.

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    9. DRAFT

    NAME: Karen Dayana Bolaños Sahamuel CODE: 272090

    HOW TO WRITE A PERSUASIVE ESSAY

    OBJECTIVES: To write the DRAFT of your persuasive essay.

    ACTIVITY 1 (In class)

    1. Write your DRAFT based on the feedback received on your outline and the samples given in previous activities, in class, and in VS. Your draft cannot
    exceed the word limit: 340-370 words.

    Could intelligent machines surpass human labor? Currently the advancement of technology is becoming increasingly large
    in society, which has led to great things, but this negatively impacts the lives of people and their daily lives. The creation of
    intelligent machines is changing the way many people work, taking away their work or decreasing their functions. The
    automation of jobs may leave many people unemployed and unable to have a decent life. As well as the decrease of human
    interaction, as we are surrounded by applications and devices that distance us more and more from other people.
    Introduction

    Therebefore, intelligent machines should not replace the work of people. (106)
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    First, Intelligent machines generate a large loss of new employment opportunities. According to a study by the McKinsey
    Global Institute (MGI), in which experts from the Oxford Economics Department and the World Bank participated, it is
    Argumentative paragraph

    expected that between 400 and 800 million people will be displaced from their jobs due to the creation of robots. People will
    have no way to live if they do not have a job that allows them to meet their needs. Intelligent machines are therefore a
    danger to people's job stability. (87)

    On the other hand, opponents say that the implementation of intelligent machines allows them to perform work in less time
    Counter-Argument

    and in an easier way. But these jobs can be performed by several people to streamline the development of different tasks
    and create new job opportunities where people can learn different things, live new experiences, meet people from other
    countries, travel to different countries, and learn about other cultures. Also, these new job opportunities will benefit people in
    their daily life. (81)

    In conclusion, robots should not replace human work, since intelligent machines replace the work of many people and this
    affects their economic, social and (WW)(PUN) mental lives and (WW)(PUN) their families will be seriously affected and the
    Conclusion

    years of studies of these people will be time. (PUN) and lost money. Therefore, intelligent machines should not change
    people's lives by taking away their jobs and negatively affecting their lives daily. (69)
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    POSITIVE COMMENTS COMMENTS TO IMPROVE

    Punctuation marks and some words.

    The thesis and the arguments are clear, it is a text that is easily understood
    and the intention of this is. I think the subject is covered well and from an
    interesting and real point.

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